In the first essay I chose the topic about textbooks because I thought it was really related to our life. My main point was textbooks is too expensive for students. Thus, I tried to describe how costly the textbooks was and why it was a finance burden for undergraduate students. Although we used some research in the essay, it was not enough and not credible. Most part of the essay were from my own words and opinion. Besides, I should considered the opposite problem. In other words, I only stated the negative aspects rather than respect the opposite opinion.
Therefore, I tried to avoid these problems in the second essay that I argued people shouldn't overuse mobile phone. In order to employ the critical analysis in the essay, not only did I describe the seriousness of overusing mobile phone around the world, I stated why people did that and what can mobile help us. However, I made many mistakes in using outside researches and strongly presenting my position.
But it's OK, I made some improvement in the second work at least. For the third essay, I concluded the mistakes I made and then tried to create a better essay. Till now, I recognize I should consider or respect the opposite points such as the why the problem exist and why the problem is hard to solve; I know I have to use credible evidence to prove or support my points; I learn how to logically organize an essay and present my position strongly; I know I should attract attention at the beginning of my work and conclude the main points in the end.
Certainly, I still have some weakness in academic writing. I can hardly avoid the grammar mistakes in writing, and my vocabulary is not large enough. Thus, I can not completely present what I want to say in essay. Also it is hard to get good academic research for my points, and sometimes I have to use much time to concluded the ideas of the outside research into my essay. And I am working on representing my ideas in detail using marshal evidence and observation to support judgement.
Finally, I realize that creating these three essays is process of building up my writing strategies. The first essay formed the base for the second essay while the first and second essays formed the base for the third essay. In other words, the last essay is the combination of the first and second works. Specifically, we should present the problem and our position at first, analysis the opposite aspects and support our position by evidence, and offer the solution in the end.
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